Script feedback.

Today I got my script feedback form Simon for my comedy drama 'If I was King' there was a lot of feedback! Simon thought that it lacked detail and a sense for the surroundings. I feel this was fair as in some parts of the script I ignored detail and focused on just getting the story down I feel I know where details need to be added but I was probably being lazy with it and concentrating more on getting the story down. Simon feels that the script is dialog heavy. I agree there are some bits that could be cut down but on the whole I disagree. As it is a comedy drama in the research I have carried out I have found that its your characters where you get the comedy and drama from you need to let your characters have a voice, allow them to breath. Simon Nye is an English comic television writer was once quoted for saying. "I don't do mad, plot-driven farragoes. You have to allow your characters time to talk"


My original idea was for If I was King to be a pilot episode. The idea was to write a 30 min script with the idea of being able to stretch the pilot idea over a 6 episode series, but I don't know if that's what commissioners want from a pilot, my research is ongoing. Also I have been looking for other platforms where it could sit as the majority of comedy festivals are 5-10min films. but my research is still on going.  
So not all is lost. As I knew there was still a lot of work to be done to my script but I am pleased with my first draft and reading up on the British Comedy Guide web site it says 


' The best tip is "don’t get it right – get it written!". Once the basics are on paper it is then much easier to polish things up. Remember: nothing in the world can take the place of perseverance. The slogan “press on” has solved and always will solve the problems of the human race. After all it won’t write itself!

Your aim should be to end up with a draft that is solid for character, plot and situation - it doesn't have to be perfect before you send it off, after all, any script can be made funnier. If the commissioner can't see the idea from a decent early draft... well... perhaps he ought not!'

So all in all I feel I'm in a good place.